Friday, March 8, 2013

My Little Red Riding Hood Narrative By Oh S'mar





Little Red Riding Hood

Once upon a time there was a little girl called Little Red Riding Hood and a mother called Suzie. They lived in a small  cottage by Bunny Woods. They had a Grandmother. Her mother told Little Red Riding Hood  that her Grandmother was very ill. Her Grandmother was under the weather. So Suzie a baked custard tart. She told Little Red Riding Hood to stay on the path of Bunny Woods and not to talk to strangers. Mum said “Go and take this custard tart to Grandmother”. “Yes” said Little Red Riding Hood. So Suzie gave Little Red Riding Hood the Custard tart and then Little Red Riding Hood went off. As she was walking she came across a wolf. The wolf said “Where are you going to Little Red Riding Hood”?. “I’m going to my Grandmothers house” said Little Red Riding Hood. So the Wolf said “Ok I will tell her that you are on your way”. “Ok  you can tell her” said Little Red Riding Hood. So the Wolf went to Grandma’s house and knocked on the door. Grandma said “Who is it?”. The Wolf said “It’s me Grandma”. So the Grandma opened the door and the Wolf gobbled her up. He put her clothes on and slept on the bed covered with a blanket. Little Red Riding Hood came in and went in the bed and said “Why do you have a big noise? and Why do you have such big ears?”
said Little Red Riding Hood . Then the Wolf got so angry that the Wolf gobbled her up. Then the wood chopper was walking and heard screaming so the wood chopper came and cut out his stomach open. Out popped Little Red Riding Hood and Grandma. Then Little Red Riding hood gave her Grandmother the Custard tart and they all lived happily ever after the end.  

5 comments:

Zeba said...

Hi Oh S'mar

I think you should proof read your work and I like how you used your speech marks.

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Zeba

Creedence and June said...

Hi Oh S'mar,

I like how you used your speech marks. I think you should proof read your story more

from Creedence and June

Creedence and June said...

Hi Oh S'mar,

I like how you used your speech marks. I think you should proof read your story more

from Creedence and June

Leilani and Jessie said...

Hi Oh S'ma


Your story is so cool and me and Leilani likes you story of Little Red Riding Hood.
Keep up the great work.

Andre said...

Well done Oh S'mar I like how you told the story.It has Really good personification which made it a really interesting story to read.

Andre