Monday, May 10, 2010

Loisi's recount on the Waitakere Dam Trip

Loisi had a great time. She liked how Mia's Nan Selina looked after her. Loisi enjoyed going on the train and looking at the glow worms and wetas. Check out her recount.

1 comment:

Room 3 said...

Hi Loisi,

We liked how you used expression and how you spoke clearly. Try not to have as many "ands" in your writing. We liked how you paused at the full stops.

From Room 3